Hello! My name is Kelly. Today, I want to share some of my favorite things with you. I do these things almost everyday and they really help me feel much better when I am depressed. Now, I will introduce my top 3 favorite things to do; I like to listen to music, eat delicious food, and play with my friends.
To begin with, I like to listen to music. There are many kinds of music I like, but my favorite ones are english pop songs and K-pops. I usually listen to music with my mp3 player, but sometimes I listen to music in Youtube. English pop songs and korean pop songs are very similar, but I like K-pops better because the lyrics are written in Korean. I also like english pop songs. Some of my favorite english pop songs are Lemon Tree, Sk8er Boi, and Baby(Justin Bieber). I also like classical music. When I hear classical music, I feel relaxed and calm. I like that feeling. Music makes me happy!
Next, I love eating delicious food. Well, eating delicious food is something that everyone likes. I bet you also like to eat delicious food. I usually eat at home because my mom told me that food that are sold outside include too much ingredients that are bad for our health. But my family sometimes eats outside because my sister and I always beg for it. My favorite food are steak(medium), salad, and Chinese food. I like Korean food, too. Delicious food also make me happy!
Last of all, I like to play with my friends. I really hate to be lonely, and I depend on my friends very much. Whenever I feel sad or angry, my friends always listen to me and try their best to make me feel better. Since I like my friends so much, I play with them everyday. We go shopping, we play on the playground, we chatter, and sometimes, we even sleepover at one of our houses. Friends are the most important thing that makes me happy.
In conclusion, I wrote 3 things I like and they are listening to music, eating delicious food, and play with my friends. Actually, there are so many things I like to do, so I had a hard time choosing top 3 favorite things. I hope you enjoyed!
Hi Kelly! I'm your Writing TA Won-Woo. I enjoyed reading your post and I see that you used transitions well in the beginning of each paragraph. You also gave good examples of music you like. The only mistake I would say is that instead of "in my home", it is "at home" since home means my house. Overall, it's a good essay. :)
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DeleteHi- You are a very good writer. Thank you for sharing these things. The introduction is well-written. My only suggestion is to use pictures, videos or links to illustrate your writing.
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